Zarn Ishtare wrote:This is by far my favorite comment; as particularly comment starved as I am, to log on to the only thread I pay attention to, and see "Ooh, someone commented!" And then to find that instead of there being a thoughtful critique of my poetry, there is only a sarcastic comment! The joy of it!
I didn't think that through, I thought I was being funny when I was just being a jerk and I apologise.
Although in the unlikely possibility that it's a one-word poem I still like it.
In truth my favourites on this page is this one...
Zarn Ishtare wrote:there was a girl with your face today
every smile was your smile
and every laugh was your laugh
but I couldn't be satisfied
with this replacement act
My sci-fi and fantasy loving mind wants to interpret this as a doppleganger situation, but I think it speaks more powerfully in a real world people change/relationship falling apart sense, when you feel like you don't know the other person anymore. It's kind of sad too because it sounds like he's going to give up on her and I don't know if she'll see it coming and be really heartbroken.
...and "Poem" and the one above it in that post. They both start off with single line spaces and then condense at the end, which is also when the direction changes in both, so I thought that was cool. I particularly like the "mind virus poem" line.
How does one comment on poetry without sounding pretentious?