TG and my song we wrote

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TG and my song we wrote

Postby Ella Edric » Fri Oct 01, 2010 6:55 pm

TG and I wrote a song and decided to post it here! :)

[SIZE="4"]~Puppet~[/SIZE]

verse 1
You hold me, you move me, you twist me, you change me,
I hear you, I fear you, your voice is hissing in my head.
And I try to, ignore you, but your grip is too tight.
I feel your strings pull me, and I try to fight...

Chorus
Im just a puppet in your hands,
Youre bending my heart to your will!
I've tried to let go but I cant,
youre like a sickness inside me!

I hear you whisper in my head,
Calling me to what I know is wrong!
Your words caress my confused heart,
your strings hold me in the dark!

verse 2
You test me, you shape me, till I give into you.
You corrupt me, you lie to me, till all thats left is a shell.
I can't stop listening, your lies are to sweet.
I hate you I love you and I know it's not right...

Chorus
Im just a puppet in your hands,
Youre bending my heart to your will!
I've tried to let go but I cant,
youre like a sickness inside me!

I hear you whisper in my head,
Calling me to what I know is wrong!
Your words caress my confused heart,
your strings hold me in the dark!

[bridge will go here once it is written XD]

Chorus
Im just a puppet in your hands,
Youre bending my heart to your will!
I've tried to let go but I cant,
youre like a sickness inside me!

I hear you whisper in my head,
Calling me to what I know is wrong!
Your words caress my confused heart,
your strings hold me in the dark!(x2)
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Postby Yuki-Anne » Fri Oct 01, 2010 7:03 pm

I can see this being a really awesome song, if the music is good enough. Like, I think music like this would really suit these lyrics...
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Postby armeck » Fri Oct 01, 2010 7:26 pm

in a vague way it reminds me of the song "the boy who wanted to be a real puppet" but sonta arctica, i like it! putting music to it would be awesome!
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Postby Ella Edric » Fri Oct 01, 2010 7:37 pm

Yeah, we do have a melody for it. :) Once we get the chance we'll post the song the song here for everyone. ^^
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Postby Furen » Fri Oct 01, 2010 9:52 pm

It'll be interesting to see how it turns out.
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Postby TGJesusfreak » Sat Oct 02, 2010 10:52 am

I am particularly proud of this song because I took Cassie's melody and added the correct chords to it. =D I had only been playing guitar for 8 months at the time. (I'm at 1 year now)... so this song is a big deal to me XD

And it's fun! =D
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Postby ABlipinTime » Sun Oct 03, 2010 7:25 pm

Just curious; what's this song about?
It sounds like a song to Satan or some demon or something. Just saying, it'd probably be wise to write a hymn of praise to God while and after you work on this in order that you balance out the time, that is, think about good, pleasant things as much (and MORE) than evil.

I'm not trying to discourage your song-writing talent. I just want you two to stay safe spiritually, iykwim.
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Postby Tamachan319 » Thu Oct 07, 2010 9:29 pm

Awesome, guys. If you put it to music, it would be stuck in my head for a lifetime. :)
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Postby Ella Edric » Fri Oct 08, 2010 12:39 pm

[quote="ABlipinTime (post: 1428933)"]Just curious]

Yep! :D Thanks for your advice! And yeah, thats what we're doing! ^^
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