Oh, my false piety;
my copy-cat humility
God see through my fakery
Take me Home
Short, but significant. Very well written.
And I really loved the rhyming yet not-strict-keeping-to-formula (erm... 'freeform'? o_O I'm not quite sure what to call it) of your last poem. Was that one called 'my catalyst'? It didn't have a title at the bottom like your other ones. But the rhyme and just altogether the way you put the poem together is really effective. I liked the 'feel' of it in my mind as I read it. Very... hmm... 'beaty' in a way. You know, like it has a great beat or rhythm. Very nice.
Your second poem, 'Stages Of Anger: The Light, The Feel, The Sound' had a great air of forcefulness; the short, direct lines and repetition of a similar pattern in the different verses. It worked very well.
Of course, I could just post 'I really liked your poems', and it would be fine for me to do that: but where and when I can, I like to be more specific. Especially since sometimes I feel that when I write 'I really liked your poems' it doesn't sound believeable (perhaps because of the simplicity of the statement) even though it's true.
Yet be there a day when I have nothing else to say -perhaps I'm too tired or don't have enough time (or brainpower) to form a more detailed reply, and so merely reply to your newest creations with a 'I really liked them'... please know that it is the truth. It is an understatement, that simple sentence, but the truth is that I really enjoy reading your poems and consider them incredible.
Just so you know.
I seem to keep editing this post to add more.
But I just had a thought: one day, if I'm not too busy with my other projects, I'd love to make an image and place one of your poems over the top of it. I think that would be really neat: to use one of your works as inspiration and try to create a background/picture to accompany it.
Of course, I'm not sure if that will ever happen; but if I ever have the time etc to do so, I'll let you know and ask your permission. ^_^